tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post1935689866880533611..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: First Impressions - Goodnight Sweet Princemshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-73396325940390174092016-01-07T03:09:52.123-05:002016-01-07T03:09:52.123-05:00I say many thanks to the father of the website adm...I say many thanks to the father of the website admin I read this, because at this website I know a lot of information information that I did not know before his<br /><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/WwrIoq" rel="nofollow">Suplemen Untuk Ibu Hamil</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/LGXweM" rel="nofollow">Cara Menjaga Kesehatan Janin</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/ri9IZm" rel="nofollow">Obat Penguat Daya Ingat</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/RjWs4O" rel="nofollow">Suplemen Pelangsing</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/3sDFmK" rel="nofollow">Vitamin Peremajaan Kulit</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/naXCsY" rel="nofollow">Vitamin Untuk Kesehatan Tulang</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/LE1bzv" rel="nofollow">Suplemen Herbal Penghilang Kolesterol Dalam Darah</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/GcnUIa" rel="nofollow">Suplemen Alami Penurun Kolesterol Tinggi</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/obqBh3" rel="nofollow">Green World Blueberry Concentrate</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/9sm51m" rel="nofollow">Nutrisi Untuk Kecerdasan Anak</a> Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17382737205881876895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-31911190013566096012015-08-06T09:54:20.645-04:002015-08-06T09:54:20.645-04:00Thank you Marcy, for your helpful feedback, and to...Thank you Marcy, for your helpful feedback, and to everyone who commented. I was planning to start the chapter with a short quote from a press release, but I decided to leave it out here, to save word count and see if the story could work without it. I'll post it here, and would be interested if anyone who read wants to share if you think it would help with the confusion, or if it doesn't really add anything. <br /><br />(Press Release, March 18, 2015) Artiste Tours regrets to announce that Rock Escape has canceled their concert at Forum Copenhagen on March 19, 2015 due to the untimely passing of the father of band members, Harm and Mars Genova. Our thoughts and hearts are with the Genova family at this difficult time. The remaining European concerts in the Whole Wild World tour have also been canceled. All tickets for the shows on March 19th, 20th, and 21st will be refunded. <br /><br />Thanks again for all the feedback and encouragement!Maria Mainerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12839883252262642051noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-26633667556796723972015-08-05T13:10:06.333-04:002015-08-05T13:10:06.333-04:00Yeah, I already commented once. I do really like t...Yeah, I already commented once. I do really like this first page. Crystal Collierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03912469552483168148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-57748028903249270942015-08-05T13:00:37.209-04:002015-08-05T13:00:37.209-04:00Interesting start here.Interesting start here.Mina Burrowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14483363743530076604noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-66355063709800643172015-08-05T11:36:00.834-04:002015-08-05T11:36:00.834-04:00The writing is so smooth and descriptive! Loved th...The writing is so smooth and descriptive! Loved this!Julie Daohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13814052162359300933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-22371410030610351652015-08-04T11:34:37.820-04:002015-08-04T11:34:37.820-04:00Good descriptions. Wow. A fine writer always picks...Good descriptions. Wow. A fine writer always picks me up and puts me in the middle of the scene. And there I was, sitting in the next aisle. :)Huntresshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08155372788872245758noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-55815989001855908092015-08-04T10:38:48.583-04:002015-08-04T10:38:48.583-04:00I like this a lot too. I think, thought, I'd ...I like this a lot too. I think, thought, I'd delete this sentence, since it slows up the story: "Listening to Dad’s voice, he could picture him—gray hair, thick-rimmed glasses, and kind, serious expression." I have to think that since Dad is dead, it doesn't matter too much what he looked like?Lizahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16170701034715108039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-12251948185413151042015-08-03T17:30:32.644-04:002015-08-03T17:30:32.644-04:00Here I am again, trailing behind Lexa, just like I...Here I am again, trailing behind Lexa, just like I did on Dianne's place. :)<br /><br />Just wanted to check out your critique, Marcie. Nice job. And again, I would definitely continue reading this story.<br />Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-73470325277302847532015-08-03T15:26:28.037-04:002015-08-03T15:26:28.037-04:00This was a great entry! I left my (rather long) co...This was a great entry! I left my (rather long) comments at Dianne's, but wanted to stop by and read Marcy's crit. Spot on, as usual. Wishing you both a great week. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07735576044552810103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-5111287636687535652015-08-03T10:36:28.450-04:002015-08-03T10:36:28.450-04:00I'm a sucker for Hamlet stories, so I'd de...I'm a sucker for Hamlet stories, so I'd definitely keep reading. I'd want to know who his Ophelia is, too.M.J. Fifieldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15626475963328519693noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-76878657134795065212015-08-03T09:10:18.420-04:002015-08-03T09:10:18.420-04:00I have to say that the first few paragraphs did no...I have to say that the first few paragraphs did nothing to grab me. Misha Gerrickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06364173848456424521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-12280393850846729192015-08-03T05:53:58.771-04:002015-08-03T05:53:58.771-04:00somebody should put August on trial for this shame...somebody should put August on trial for this shameful sneakiness.<br />The first page didn't really grip me.... but I'm difficult to grip :) DEZMONDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14127166104359407763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-21586557851259518692015-08-03T05:47:40.633-04:002015-08-03T05:47:40.633-04:00Actually, I was confused through most of it.Actually, I was confused through most of it.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-8350031146740371672015-08-03T05:41:58.565-04:002015-08-03T05:41:58.565-04:00Confused on lots of levels - but more than willing...Confused on lots of levels - but more than willing to read more.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.com