tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post3648214976670249919..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: First Impressions - untitledmshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-19467985038867990382014-09-16T22:30:58.035-04:002014-09-16T22:30:58.035-04:00This isn't the sort of story I usually read, b...This isn't the sort of story I usually read, but it sounds quite interesting. I'd probably keep reading to learn more about the clockwork dragon. Great start!Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-17365723888123625442014-09-15T22:58:31.203-04:002014-09-15T22:58:31.203-04:00A clockwork dragon: what a fabulous word combinati...A clockwork dragon: what a fabulous word combination.The Armchair Squidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10739833215220853127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-11097484769334168202014-09-15T11:32:23.907-04:002014-09-15T11:32:23.907-04:00This beginning is pretty good. Need to see more.This beginning is pretty good. Need to see more.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-61577867744183196972014-09-11T22:20:25.090-04:002014-09-11T22:20:25.090-04:00i like the sound of this! love the idea of a clock...i like the sound of this! love the idea of a clockwork dragon - sounds like she won this battle, but more will come. my only suggestion - make sure the verbs are all in the same tense and more active (ex. last line - Betting my cards she ran home...)<br />great opening scene!Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-24672407089975429072014-09-10T07:56:34.530-04:002014-09-10T07:56:34.530-04:00An intriguing beginning. An intriguing beginning. Alhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15625543235578144620noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-49662111721147000382014-09-09T08:42:50.758-04:002014-09-09T08:42:50.758-04:00poor clockwork dragon... poor clockwork dragon... DEZMONDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14127166104359407763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-44684743307426682302014-09-08T19:07:32.769-04:002014-09-08T19:07:32.769-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.-blessed holy socks, the non-perishable-zealothttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00241446130197185049noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-25989114646499347592014-09-08T16:53:56.173-04:002014-09-08T16:53:56.173-04:00Just saw this on Dianne's blog! I suggested ti...Just saw this on Dianne's blog! I suggested tightening up the language and axing unnecessary words to make the action even more urgent and immediate. But this is a great, compelling start!Julie Daohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13814052162359300933noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-84198532945061449722014-09-08T16:33:01.479-04:002014-09-08T16:33:01.479-04:00Is this chapter one? I have a lot of the same ques...Is this chapter one? I have a lot of the same questions. The paragraphs leave me with lots of questions. Great critique!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-16985370613543524212014-09-08T15:10:59.213-04:002014-09-08T15:10:59.213-04:00I still don't understand the whole "steam...I still don't understand the whole "steampunk" concept, but great start! Being without internet is the worst part of moving.Stephanie Farishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10461865229341760836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-5364460468773803592014-09-08T09:22:03.501-04:002014-09-08T09:22:03.501-04:00I actually just left my comments over on Dianne...I actually just left my comments over on Dianne's site. I'm with Alex. The first line is very intriguing!S.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-56325395173168778312014-09-08T07:19:18.907-04:002014-09-08T07:19:18.907-04:00I know Talynn!
I really like this beginning. A clo...I know Talynn!<br />I really like this beginning. A clockwork dragon is intriguing.<br />Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com