tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post5640145238248876889..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions #3 - Foreshadowmshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-34587593515706109862011-06-06T20:16:39.455-04:002011-06-06T20:16:39.455-04:00I thought she did a really good job and deserves a...I thought she did a really good job and deserves a pat on the back. But, you're right about the hot policeman with her mother just dead...easily fixed, tho. Don't give up, lots of interest here!!Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-77685844213470492752011-06-06T07:00:04.725-04:002011-06-06T07:00:04.725-04:00I commented over on Dianne's blog as well, so ...I commented over on Dianne's blog as well, so I won't repeat myself, except to say that your suggestion, Marcy, is a nice solution--having her more gradually notice his attractiveness, or waiting until another time entirely so the contrast between grief and *sa-woon* isn't so stark. Again I'll say it, though--really nice job, Brea. A ton of potential here, and I'd keep reading!Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06636585111057799728noreply@blogger.com