tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post5771822969143320647..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: First Impressions - Finding Homemshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-42993294258107912622014-08-06T21:19:59.091-04:002014-08-06T21:19:59.091-04:00Thanks everyone I really appreciate the comments.....Thanks everyone I really appreciate the comments... I think I may be a bit addicted to editing but it is obviously not gonna be a bad thing for me to continue to do it!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13864898827831713032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-60839611248065266542014-08-05T21:41:46.340-04:002014-08-05T21:41:46.340-04:00It struck me as odd that Tsering hung around out o...It struck me as odd that Tsering hung around out of concern for Kate's welfare, perhaps, but didn't warn her about the drunkard before she went into the laundromat... or maybe go inside with her. Shy, maybe? I agree about not using quotation marks for Kate's internal dialog, and also about the ending being good. <br /><br />Good luck with this, Zoe.Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-8912178316401193892014-08-05T13:36:43.152-04:002014-08-05T13:36:43.152-04:00I commented on some of the mechanics on Dianne'...I commented on some of the mechanics on Dianne's blog. I do agree that the drunk guy motif can be cliche, so it might be worth either adding a unique angle to it or going with something fresh. Stevenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06837639807533435390noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-52429624022164243942014-08-04T10:32:38.758-04:002014-08-04T10:32:38.758-04:00I agree with Alex--jump right into the action. Thi...I agree with Alex--jump right into the action. This story lost me in the first paragraph because it seems like it's far too much information that we just don't need.Stephanie Farishttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10461865229341760836noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-48828283046264724002014-08-04T09:15:31.090-04:002014-08-04T09:15:31.090-04:00too many overly short sentences for my taste too many overly short sentences for my taste DEZMONDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14127166104359407763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-19298958916795713392014-08-04T09:11:42.619-04:002014-08-04T09:11:42.619-04:00I like the stranger......I like the stranger......The Angry Lurkerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01227314379603418332noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-44921783330453740412014-08-04T06:58:37.327-04:002014-08-04T06:58:37.327-04:00Wow you used the whole thing... THanks Marcy, I ap...Wow you used the whole thing... THanks Marcy, I appreciate the critique. I need all the input I can get. Those are good catches...thanks again!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13864898827831713032noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-53306835154584091442014-08-04T06:46:05.848-04:002014-08-04T06:46:05.848-04:00I don't mind the way they got to talking, but ...I don't mind the way they got to talking, but there was too much exposition getting to that point.<br />And I'd say thoughts in either italics or nothing. Definitely not quotation marks though.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com