tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post7340213251311595793..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions - Inexorablemshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-48351607029983654662016-01-12T22:20:18.847-05:002016-01-12T22:20:18.847-05:00Banned complain !! Complaining only causes life an...Banned complain !! Complaining only causes life and mind become more severe. Enjoy the rhythm of the problems faced. No matter ga life, not a problem not learn, so enjoy it :)<br /><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/48ikh4" rel="nofollow">Obat Kuat Dan Tahan Lama Lelaki</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/5tv8fb" rel="nofollow">Beberapa Jenis Yoga Yang Dapat Menurunkan Berat Badan</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/kdAfG6" rel="nofollow">Cara Memilih Masker Yang Tepat Sesuai Dengan Kulit Wajah</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/qFAH04" rel="nofollow">Rahasia Tubuh Sehat Dan Bugar Setiap Hari</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/TFOkcH" rel="nofollow">Teh Herbal Pelangsing Untuk Menurunkan Berat Badan</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/9SYtZ4" rel="nofollow">Obat Herbal Untuk Pembentukan Tualng</a> <br /><a href="http://goo.gl/c9QkLQ" rel="nofollow">Obat Alami Penyempitan Tenggorokan</a><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/tr0i1J" rel="nofollow">Obat Kelenjar Ludah Yang Membengkak</a><br /><a href="http;//goo.gl/O2Nnt0" rel="nofollow">Obat Tradisional Untuk Menghilangkan Benjolan Di Leher</a><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/AA0HwY" rel="nofollow">Obat Herbal Untuk Menyembuhkan Insomnia</a><br /><a href="http://goo.gl/iJZQ3T" rel="nofollow">Waspada Penyakit Infeksi Lambung Saat Mudik</a><br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17382737205881876895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-61160802281197772492012-01-08T09:34:29.847-05:002012-01-08T09:34:29.847-05:00...enjoyed the piece, but am curious if perhaps I ......enjoyed the piece, but am curious if perhaps I was drawn to it more so because of my interest in this subject, and the Mothman story behind the Silver Bridge. <br /><br />For those of us who know the story, and for those who want to know more, they'll definitely take interest, as I did ;)<br /><br />ElElliot Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06319271528871804399noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-47459964401025359362012-01-07T17:20:30.657-05:002012-01-07T17:20:30.657-05:00Kittie, I thought Alex's idea was excellent, t...Kittie, I thought Alex's idea was excellent, too.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-47379852917930996562012-01-07T15:23:53.038-05:002012-01-07T15:23:53.038-05:00A really interesting excerpt - made me want to rea...A really interesting excerpt - made me want to read more. But, I agree with Alex's comment.Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-1146914240058637332012-01-07T10:57:41.325-05:002012-01-07T10:57:41.325-05:00Hmmm...I like the piece - I would definitely read ...Hmmm...I like the piece - I would definitely read it. If anything, I would pick another name besides 'Mothman'. I mean, your chapters have nice words like 'Inexorable', but your (I don't know what the word is...I'm no writer) antagonist?...has an ordinary title like 'Mothman'. I like it though - I am definitely intrigued.Lost_without_a_Maphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10025119020296055514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-82838407404909203152012-01-06T21:31:17.445-05:002012-01-06T21:31:17.445-05:00And I should add that the novel's not titled.....And I should add that the novel's not titled...Inexorable was just the chapter name. Each name was going to start w/a different word and definition, for reasons that would become increasingly apparent...Heather Day Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12353914883176152555noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-59124855087228985222012-01-06T21:27:03.859-05:002012-01-06T21:27:03.859-05:00Shoot, I just figured out you'd commented on m...Shoot, I just figured out you'd commented on my piece over here! Thanks so much for the crits! It was definitely a first draft...sometimes I don't catch those inconsistencies. I was definitely trying to get this girl's voice right, since we're in her head and she's a very VERBOSE and rather precocious chick.<br /><br />Thanks so much for this opportunity! I'd love to see you all at my blog!Heather Day Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12353914883176152555noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-2482468387482472562012-01-06T18:45:10.301-05:002012-01-06T18:45:10.301-05:00I agree on starting with the line about trying to ...I agree on starting with the line about trying to get her parents to move; though Alex makes a good point about the contradictions in the original paragraph.Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-18039230594915705432012-01-06T14:22:07.574-05:002012-01-06T14:22:07.574-05:00Hmmm, I really like this excerpt, but must admit, ...Hmmm, I really like this excerpt, but must admit, Marcy's suggestions are spot on. At any rate, I hope the writer keeps at it. Good start.Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-89017060054576594212012-01-06T10:42:36.562-05:002012-01-06T10:42:36.562-05:00Alex, that's an excellent idea!
Oh, and one t...Alex, that's an excellent idea!<br /><br />Oh, and one thing I forgot to say was that I really liked the voice in the piece.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-7907326534968420382012-01-06T07:27:52.730-05:002012-01-06T07:27:52.730-05:00Maybe start with "I used to wonder?"Maybe start with "I used to wonder?"Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-44459068497957888072012-01-06T07:24:14.717-05:002012-01-06T07:24:14.717-05:00Personally, I love this piece. Marcy does have som...Personally, I love this piece. Marcy does have some great suggestions, though.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.com