tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post7575178924664402828..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions - Crystal's Magicmshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-58777130375223745602012-01-03T13:07:56.778-05:002012-01-03T13:07:56.778-05:00What a great critique. I am really bad at descript...What a great critique. I am really bad at description and so this is a great reminder.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-22462875722119464002012-01-03T11:00:48.035-05:002012-01-03T11:00:48.035-05:00Thank you so much everyone for your comments and i...Thank you so much everyone for your comments and insights!Nicole Zoltackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07464800543376449290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-35371902184389904412012-01-02T23:51:23.077-05:002012-01-02T23:51:23.077-05:00Ack!!!...I want to know more! Sorry, I don't k...Ack!!!...I want to know more! Sorry, I don't know anything about how to make a proper critique, but as a reader I can tell you...OH, it sounds good!!!!!Lost_without_a_Maphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10025119020296055514noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-75122049758244314922012-01-02T14:13:42.242-05:002012-01-02T14:13:42.242-05:00I think your review was spot on. A tiny bit of we...I think your review was spot on. A tiny bit of well placed description would really make this piece come alive. You are off to a great start, Nicole. Would totally read more to find out exactly what she is after.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10736441732672508192noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-44193912324189793972012-01-02T11:58:12.325-05:002012-01-02T11:58:12.325-05:00On Dianne's blog, this piece is presented in s...On Dianne's blog, this piece is presented in short one-sentence paragraphs, which I assume is how she received it. That format struck me as choppy and a little disconcerting, and most agreed the writing would be improved by using longer paragraphs with sentences of varying lengths. Here, you've taken the liberty of organizing the writing into longer paragraphs, and it's absolutely astounding how much of a difference that small a change made.<br /><br />I definitely like this piece of writing, and even more so with that little change.Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-40263698004192416182012-01-02T11:14:01.484-05:002012-01-02T11:14:01.484-05:00Description is one thing that I usually have to go...Description is one thing that I usually have to go back and add in - for some reason, I tend to skim over it when writing first drafts so thanks for pointing out where I should add some!Nicole Zoltackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07464800543376449290noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-35702541084301019892012-01-02T09:33:07.935-05:002012-01-02T09:33:07.935-05:00thanks, Alex :) It's a hard to write enough de...thanks, Alex :) It's a hard to write enough description but not too much.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-55721873020239397872012-01-02T08:47:02.784-05:002012-01-02T08:47:02.784-05:00By reading Nicole's, I can see where I need mo...By reading Nicole's, I can see where I need more description in my work. You did a good job, MsHatch!Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com