tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post2675077197740900445..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: First Impressions - Gerald and the Amulet of Zonrachmshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-18587704748247990612013-10-08T22:12:00.761-04:002013-10-08T22:12:00.761-04:00The height of a wizard depends on how good he is a...The height of a wizard depends on how good he is at wizardly things. I get that and assume there will be more on this as the story unfolds. I don't think in a linear way, so I don't expect it in movies, books, or even life. I guess that explains the swarm of locust that live in my head...<br /><br />I almost forgot! I loved the first word...<br /><br />Thanks for doing a first impression on this Marcey.Pat Tilletthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17699973774273291205noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-22080805337444425352013-10-08T17:56:45.079-04:002013-10-08T17:56:45.079-04:00Thanks for all the great suggestions, I love write...Thanks for all the great suggestions, I love writers and readers. I have been beavering away today on the opening and have uploaded the first chapter to my blog again with your comments addressed. I hope you like the latest version :)Carl Hackmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03095336278626569509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-35336466676036425732013-10-08T17:33:50.740-04:002013-10-08T17:33:50.740-04:00Really loved this piece. I have no problems waiti...Really loved this piece. I have no problems waiting for the height explanation. The fact that Gerald becomes shorter each time a spell goes awry is enough for me (for now). The assistant does come off more as a superior than an assistant. That is a bit confusing, but easy to fix. Great job!Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14932408372240147454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-35582177450305354702013-10-07T17:51:10.342-04:002013-10-07T17:51:10.342-04:00Love the 'oops' and the name. Fantastic st...Love the 'oops' and the name. Fantastic start. Yes, the description could be clearer. Great voice.M Paxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14096697282530998519noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-40306578010331633242013-10-07T16:29:21.343-04:002013-10-07T16:29:21.343-04:00I want more...I want more...Libbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14323538213636795216noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-54104770165097511062013-10-07T15:37:45.688-04:002013-10-07T15:37:45.688-04:00The opening is wonderful. Imagining this short wiz...The opening is wonderful. Imagining this short wizard made me think of my mother who is only 4'8". I totally get wanting to be taller.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-88540978156272986612013-10-07T14:13:48.288-04:002013-10-07T14:13:48.288-04:00The opening is great. And the imagery is very comp...The opening is great. And the imagery is very compelling. I'm willing to wait for the height change explanation, but I was confused about Colin. I didn't think he was behaving like an assistant. And I'm not sure about the characters' ages either. But the plot sounds like fun and I think my son would really like this.Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-38392666454113137852013-10-07T12:01:01.524-04:002013-10-07T12:01:01.524-04:00The "Oops" is perfect.The "Oops" is perfect. LD Mastersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01202135756299574972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-86403028884555495952013-10-07T10:51:29.521-04:002013-10-07T10:51:29.521-04:00I commented over on Dianne's blog, but wanted ...I commented over on Dianne's blog, but wanted to come over and see what you thought. Gerald is a fun character to take an adventure with. I really enjoy humorous MG and since this page had me laughing, I'm confident the rest of the story would too. Nice writing, Carl!Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09462486350293703991noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-76688248095983368392013-10-07T10:25:20.092-04:002013-10-07T10:25:20.092-04:00Thanks you for posting my snippet. I really appre...Thanks you for posting my snippet. I really appreciate all the great comments as I am just about to start an R&R I received over the weekend.<br /><br />The brindle dog, on the left, sat by my side every day as I wrote GERALD. He passed away (only 4 years old) just after I completed the first draft. I didn't realize until I read it through again, after printing, just how much of his personality is in Zach, a character you meet a little later. The bond between Zack and Gerald are also pretty close to mine and Digby's Carl Hackmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03095336278626569509noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-87077983699676131342013-10-07T09:52:35.036-04:002013-10-07T09:52:35.036-04:00Ha! It is a fun opening. Ha! It is a fun opening. Luanne G. Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15762881276976395955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-80434165376243069452013-10-07T07:47:12.144-04:002013-10-07T07:47:12.144-04:00are those pooches Carl's beta readers? :) Love...are those pooches Carl's beta readers? :) Love the photo.... DEZMONDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14127166104359407763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-35604582089793909022013-10-07T07:40:38.761-04:002013-10-07T07:40:38.761-04:00I DO want to commenters to weight in! The more the...I DO want to commenters to weight in! The more the better so Carl can judge whether what he's writing is working.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-30872079943782277192013-10-07T07:29:40.719-04:002013-10-07T07:29:40.719-04:00I know commenters aren't supposed to say they ...I know commenters aren't supposed to say they agree, but I DO: Alex and SA hit the nail on the head.Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-63987278878004633832013-10-07T06:42:42.738-04:002013-10-07T06:42:42.738-04:00Nice to meet you, Carl
Love the title. Perfect fo...Nice to meet you, Carl<br /><br />Love the title. Perfect for an MG. I agree with Marcy's suggestions, especially the second one about the height of a wizard. That really intrigued me. You wouldn't have to go into great deal here; frankly, I wouldn't do that. Just give something to answer the reader's 'head questions' for now. Elaborate more later. <br /><br />Best of luck with this!<br /><br />S.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-20845378838438798532013-10-07T06:25:13.762-04:002013-10-07T06:25:13.762-04:00The description part confused me as well.
Why does...The description part confused me as well.<br />Why does height matter? Agree an explanation would help.<br />However, the people from the village flying by was hysterical. Sounds like it will have a great sense of humor.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com