tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post2856479536173885275..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions - Unbreakablemshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-54092232231278645372011-09-03T10:30:21.279-04:002011-09-03T10:30:21.279-04:00See? This is why I always say take my suggestions ...See? This is why I always say take my suggestions - or anyone's for that matter - with a grain of salt - because opinions vary. Dianne liked revulsion, too. <br /><br />thank you everyone who commented!mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-10124495558497523852011-09-03T08:52:08.451-04:002011-09-03T08:52:08.451-04:00I especially LIKE the use of the word "revuls...I especially LIKE the use of the word "revulsion." Talk about an attention-grabber! It's such an unexpected thing for a mother to say, so it immediately makes me want to read more.Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-49492936626790202152011-09-02T23:46:56.517-04:002011-09-02T23:46:56.517-04:00I have no idea what kind of book this is - I'm...I have no idea what kind of book this is - I'm guessing adult. That being said, I think the writing is quick and the dialogue good. <br />I agree I'd be devastated at finding out my child was a bully. I don't think (based on the words here) that revulsion is the right word though. As a mother, perhaps heartbroken, angry, dissapointed? We really have no reference for the mother or the child. Also, is this the beginning of the story? Okay, it is. I'm not sure this is the right place to start. <br />Certainly, I'm interested, though. And I love, love the title! <br />Good luck!RaShelle Workmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17582252557500502186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-4337165843779902802011-09-02T16:23:29.080-04:002011-09-02T16:23:29.080-04:00I'd be ticked to the hilt and there would be a...I'd be ticked to the hilt and there would be a lot to answer for but revulsion and disowning are a bit much.<br />I didn't get the idea he husband didn't care. I think a lot comes into play here. If you deal with someone who overreacts regularly you try to cool the situation. Also, he is in a place where he's not a liberty to react strongly. <br /><br />All in all, Marcy, good work by both you and Katie.<br /><br />Happy Weekend.Mary@GigglesandGunshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07350818228268801008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-61112929282321344152011-09-02T12:37:15.500-04:002011-09-02T12:37:15.500-04:00Sheri, thanks :)
Matt, oh I would be furious, too...Sheri, thanks :)<br /><br />Matt, oh I would be furious, too.<br /><br />Donna, I agree with you about the laughing, it struck me as odd altho, to be fair, some people do laugh at inappropriate moments and maybe that's what was happening. We are after all, only on the first page...<br /><br />Laila, yes, exactly. That's what I would wonder if I was the mom.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-23624365177648574362011-09-02T11:32:56.284-04:002011-09-02T11:32:56.284-04:00I wrote a post expressing my appreciation :-) htt...I wrote a post expressing my appreciation :-) http://philosophyofklo.blogspot.com/2011/09/accepting-criticism-along-with-special.htmlAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13955854427063032485noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-14571858351796595402011-09-02T09:50:07.949-04:002011-09-02T09:50:07.949-04:00Hmm, I wonder where the kid picked it up from. Gr...Hmm, I wonder where the kid picked it up from. Great job critiquing btw. It is so helpful to writers to have someone else look at their work. :)Laila Knighthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08430076999393883312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-55926444109902145282011-09-02T09:30:40.538-04:002011-09-02T09:30:40.538-04:00Yay :-) Thank you so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!...Yay :-) Thank you so much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13955854427063032485noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-32971557211928506152011-09-02T09:22:04.067-04:002011-09-02T09:22:04.067-04:00Wandered over from Dianne's blog. The word rev...Wandered over from Dianne's blog. The word revulsion definitely tells me there history here if only because its such a powerful word. We know bullying can be a terrible thing. There have been enough news reports about kids who've been driven to suicide (or school shootings) because of it. Did the mc know someone who'd been a victim and therefore have strong emotions against bullies? I think the word revulsion (while risky) could work, depending upon where the story's going.<br /><br />I don't get why the mom laughs. If it's a bitter or out of control kind of laugh, the reader should see it. It made me wonder, especially when the husband said he would have any future call sent to him, if the mc is emotionally fragile. Is her response to the situation appropriate.<br /><br />Very intriguing. I'd keep reading.Donna K. Weaverhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15763832177263927311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-29094816256980210202011-09-02T08:54:02.590-04:002011-09-02T08:54:02.590-04:00I'm not sure about revulsion, exactly, but I w...I'm not sure about revulsion, exactly, but I would be absolutely furious if I found out my child used a racial slur at school. Or anywhere for that matter.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-86322361370882817862011-09-02T07:19:37.995-04:002011-09-02T07:19:37.995-04:00Nice critique, Marcy. I've already read the pi...Nice critique, Marcy. I've already read the piece over on Dianne's blog. ;DS.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.com