tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post3045276012594174209..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions - Dream Thievesmshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-78806895965937573822012-12-04T21:55:59.344-05:002012-12-04T21:55:59.344-05:00The use of mangled didn't bother me, and then ...The use of mangled didn't bother me, and then it did, and then it didn't. This all happened in the space of 1 second.Libbyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14323538213636795216noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-79261045286715595822012-12-04T20:21:42.307-05:002012-12-04T20:21:42.307-05:00Excellent work and critique, you two! :)Excellent work and critique, you two! :)David P. Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17259276981865439853noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-67016500775093637342012-12-04T00:55:47.905-05:002012-12-04T00:55:47.905-05:00I'm not a YA reader - -
But I think there is t...I'm not a YA reader - -<br />But I think there is too much going on in these first few sentences.<br /><br />......dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-67198996267310318482012-12-03T23:46:58.494-05:002012-12-03T23:46:58.494-05:00I have nothing more to add. Thanks for sharing thi...I have nothing more to add. Thanks for sharing this. =)E. Arroyohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06634213563563094173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-26216501515321685542012-12-03T23:45:16.573-05:002012-12-03T23:45:16.573-05:00I think Marcy has some really great advice. I comm...I think Marcy has some really great advice. I commented on the item on Dianne's blog. Good luck, Christine! :-)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07735576044552810103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-72358655436936032412012-12-03T23:06:59.707-05:002012-12-03T23:06:59.707-05:00I just read this over at Dianne's! I knew it w...I just read this over at Dianne's! I knew it wasn't de ja vu. Christine's writing was fun to read!Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-66584095210616721672012-12-03T22:19:04.154-05:002012-12-03T22:19:04.154-05:00I commented over on Dianne's blog, so I won...I commented over on Dianne's blog, so I won't say much here. But I did want to say I think you're very brave to put your first page out there, Christine! Best of luck with this. Great potential there.Joanne R. Fritzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08076959910493197255noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-33148820331426376012012-12-03T22:09:54.717-05:002012-12-03T22:09:54.717-05:00thank you everyone for commenting :)thank you everyone for commenting :)mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-78362877845106795182012-12-03T19:53:44.370-05:002012-12-03T19:53:44.370-05:00From a reader's perspective, I liked the title...From a reader's perspective, I liked the title "Dream Thieves" and I agree w/ LG about the boyfriend abuse. To me what hooked me was this sentence: "Thanks to my ex-boyfriend, Graham, these nightmares have invaded my life for the past three months." At that point I wanted to know more about that vs. her everyday life. Make sense?<br /><br />Either way, I enjoyed what you've got. Best of luck Christine.Mina Burrowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14483363743530076604noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-46895029115870879942012-12-03T19:48:16.075-05:002012-12-03T19:48:16.075-05:00Thank you so much, Marcy. Your comments have been ...Thank you so much, Marcy. Your comments have been so helpful. I can't thank you enough. Also, thank you to all who have commented. Your feedback is appreciated and helpful. Christine Danekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00979611961825725350noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-3398503505873772492012-12-03T12:37:04.598-05:002012-12-03T12:37:04.598-05:00I already commented at Dianne's, so I'll k...I already commented at Dianne's, so I'll keep it short here. It never occurred to me that her reaction to the threat of boarding school was unusual. When I was growing up, boarding school was reserved for the "rich kids", and being sent away usually meant they weren't particularly wanted at home.Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-83980102989962979182012-12-03T12:20:23.556-05:002012-12-03T12:20:23.556-05:00You ask good questions. The title "Dream Thie...You ask good questions. The title "Dream Thieves" does make you question as to whether the injuries are from dream or reality. It's a very "Nightmare on Elm Street" scenario that I'm envisioning. But there isn't enough to go on here.<br /><br />Dream fiction needs to be handled with care. It can easily turn into something that frustrates a reader.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-37419574751171750122012-12-03T09:22:56.990-05:002012-12-03T09:22:56.990-05:00I agree with you there, LG.I agree with you there, LG.mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-61830698531491650792012-12-03T09:13:42.419-05:002012-12-03T09:13:42.419-05:00It's hard to say without seeing more, but the ...It's hard to say without seeing more, but the topic of boyfriend abuse is intriguing to me. It's something that a lot of teenage girls experience, so it's a worthy subject to dive into deeper. Luanne G. Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15762881276976395955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-67593172709011300222012-12-03T09:05:27.906-05:002012-12-03T09:05:27.906-05:00It is interesting, isn't it? And it illustrate...It is interesting, isn't it? And it illustrates how important it is to get more than a single opinion. mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-32342893221698000542012-12-03T08:52:42.819-05:002012-12-03T08:52:42.819-05:00I'd want to know which was the focus - the dre...I'd want to know which was the focus - the dreams and boyfriend or the boarding school.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-10248489882958644532012-12-03T08:46:31.244-05:002012-12-03T08:46:31.244-05:00I just love seeing the different takes on these pa...I just love seeing the different takes on these pages here and at Dianne's.Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.com