tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post3081377549662086769..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: First Impressions - Hauntedmshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-28801516656798763472012-12-06T15:56:45.946-05:002012-12-06T15:56:45.946-05:00I love some of the phrasing in this piece. I'd...I love some of the phrasing in this piece. I'd read on. :)Lydia Kanghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00484415427764822386noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-50414693757670596562012-12-06T10:41:46.047-05:002012-12-06T10:41:46.047-05:00When I see your header, there's always a big s...When I see your header, there's always a big sigh. So beautiful!<br /><br />Thank you, thank you for your support. You are truly a wonderful person! Yes, I'd love to do an interview. If you send me some questions (as you like, no censorship here), I'll answer and send to you today. kittiehoward@gmail.com<br /><br />Hugs!Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-90825716631747889422012-12-06T09:56:32.117-05:002012-12-06T09:56:32.117-05:00Will there be an accident? I'd rather it start...Will there be an accident? I'd rather it start with the accident and she's thinking some of this as the paramedics are working on her. (Those are the kinds of comments you get from people when you post your work for the world. :)) But good skills. The first three paragraphs could be sharper, but after those three, it gets much better...kept me interested. I say KEEP WRITING!Anitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06333494452915600562noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-64295099929734471342012-12-06T04:03:57.135-05:002012-12-06T04:03:57.135-05:00I didn't have any additional questions to what...I didn't have any additional questions to what you asked. I think the tension of this section is well done. Seems like foreshadowing of a sort.<br /><br />Shannon at <a href="http://thewarriormuse.com/" rel="nofollow">The Warrior Muse</a>Shannon Lawrencehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00934641808195675935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-15356505376554496312012-12-05T22:58:55.904-05:002012-12-05T22:58:55.904-05:00Thanks for the feedback, Marcy. This was great! Th...Thanks for the feedback, Marcy. This was great! The driving part is answered later in the story. It is deliberately left out right now. And thanks to everyone for the comments. Susan Oloierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07311938400999953443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-15616793028578406362012-12-05T21:09:46.723-05:002012-12-05T21:09:46.723-05:00This is really good. It reminds me of a childhood...This is really good. It reminds me of a childhood friend of mine that had a similar incident. It didn't end well for him and reading this piece made me instantly recall that memory. I agree with Marcy and filling in some detail. Mina Burrowshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14483363743530076604noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-24869462815466346002012-12-05T16:14:33.749-05:002012-12-05T16:14:33.749-05:00I think your questions and suggestions are spot-on...I think your questions and suggestions are spot-on. Kick it in the beginning and the story will just run.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-54816020502250306232012-12-05T14:17:21.681-05:002012-12-05T14:17:21.681-05:00I really like your critique. I do want to know wha...I really like your critique. I do want to know what will happen but I also want to know more about what has taken place.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-14614175694367069832012-12-05T09:52:11.398-05:002012-12-05T09:52:11.398-05:00I like the feel of it. I mean, you can tell she...I like the feel of it. I mean, you can tell she's nervous about driving in the rain and that it's possible something bad might happen. So, yeah, good opening tension. :)Luanne G. Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15762881276976395955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-56937739502682764642012-12-05T08:31:19.674-05:002012-12-05T08:31:19.674-05:00i'd like to know what happens next too. tensio...i'd like to know what happens next too. tension is mounting! i feel a crash coming!Tara Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07587802105993889515noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-59731494793872478382012-12-05T07:11:03.584-05:002012-12-05T07:11:03.584-05:00I already commented on Dianne's blog, but Marc...I already commented on Dianne's blog, but Marcy brings up some other points too. It's interesting to see the different viewpoints. Thanks and good luck Susan.Christine Danekhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00979611961825725350noreply@blogger.com