tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post366075194736682125..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions - Fix Your Lifemshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-16864245385667679022011-12-03T12:38:47.061-05:002011-12-03T12:38:47.061-05:00Great critique. It is creepy and because of that ...Great critique. It is creepy and because of that is a very hooky opening that makes me want to know more! I just hope it's not a dream! :)Kimberlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17323788304469008867noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-69119151281614893192011-12-02T18:42:31.494-05:002011-12-02T18:42:31.494-05:00Oh Dexter...what ills aren't thou a part of?
...Oh Dexter...what ills aren't thou a part of?<br /><br />Very good opening page. Certainly would drive me to read more.Angela Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03324366495151363782noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-25400690117923931342011-12-02T10:54:29.147-05:002011-12-02T10:54:29.147-05:00Again, wonderful edits. I was nervous about readin...Again, wonderful edits. I was nervous about reading the critiques you and Dianne wrote, but I'm so glad I sucked up my courage. Thank you again.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-41798707069656018592011-12-02T08:15:26.713-05:002011-12-02T08:15:26.713-05:00Good critique. I already commented on Dianne's...Good critique. I already commented on Dianne's post, so I won't repeat what I wrote there, but I do agree the writing is more powerful without the adverbs.Susan Flett Swiderskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09425315552148200073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-78831239659372689162011-12-02T07:57:11.630-05:002011-12-02T07:57:11.630-05:00My second book starts with a thought that doesn...My second book starts with a thought that doesn't have a 'dialogue' tag. Or would that be thought tag? And who doesn't dig a deranged elf?Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-76718787160181723302011-12-02T07:49:11.536-05:002011-12-02T07:49:11.536-05:00I already commented on Dianne's blog, so I won...I already commented on Dianne's blog, so I won't repeat. I do like the tension created here, just a little leery if this is a dream. <br /><br />Nicely done!S.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-58030653854877982362011-12-02T07:01:16.418-05:002011-12-02T07:01:16.418-05:00Certainly does hook you inCertainly does hook you inAlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15625543235578144620noreply@blogger.com