tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post3724208731962227638..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions #1mshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-51722890751394230112011-05-03T12:36:43.551-04:002011-05-03T12:36:43.551-04:00Yep, I like what you did with it. I'm gonna ch...Yep, I like what you did with it. I'm gonna check out Becca's blog - I like the name!Tina Laurel Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04482757085942311091noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-18786405459316605482011-05-02T22:03:56.203-04:002011-05-02T22:03:56.203-04:00Excellent feedback for a tempting first page!Excellent feedback for a tempting first page!50 foot QEhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09697824892799344961noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-69351485113044874752011-05-02T21:23:19.754-04:002011-05-02T21:23:19.754-04:00A very good story begining and a very good analysi...A very good story begining and a very good analysis. For me though the telling in the first line didn't bother me. "Surreal" is really Olivia's feelings on the situation. The quickest way to "show" that feeling is to describe the situation, which Becca did immediatly after. <br /><br />Than you both for puting this up!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11271149538259398956noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-48527814605590640192011-05-02T09:46:39.989-04:002011-05-02T09:46:39.989-04:00First, a big award to Becca for her bravery. I...First, a big award to Becca for her bravery. I'm always in awe of those who step forward. But I enjoyed what she wrote, wanted to know more and thought your suggestions were spot-on and nicely presented(like going to the doc and learning one has a slight cold and not pneumonia!)Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.com