tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post5278229774629573141..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: First Impressions - Silhouettemshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-36319756536214632072015-06-06T10:00:03.762-04:002015-06-06T10:00:03.762-04:00I'd also turn the page! Actually, I like a bit...I'd also turn the page! Actually, I like a bit of back story, if neatly done.Kittie Howardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07756250649095903317noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-33865624776641731682015-06-03T18:43:03.994-04:002015-06-03T18:43:03.994-04:00Great critique, Marcy! (I left my crit for this on...Great critique, Marcy! (I left my crit for this on Dianne's blog, but I'll do the previous one here.)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07735576044552810103noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-26332533301407946902015-06-03T17:16:58.780-04:002015-06-03T17:16:58.780-04:00Interesting. Yes, I would turn the page. Lots of...Interesting. Yes, I would turn the page. Lots of questions - which hopefully can be answered.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-48470491134979901952015-06-03T10:38:29.515-04:002015-06-03T10:38:29.515-04:00The first thing I thought of was 'invaded by w...The first thing I thought of was 'invaded by what/whom?' Other than that, I like the first paragraph. As I read, I also noticed the voice of your MC. I think there's a ton of potential to expand upon it here. Maybe if you included thoughts about this 'invasion' and how the MC feels about it - fear, anger, etc... I'm really curious about what this invasion is and how it's effects changed this MC. Just my thoughts.... S.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-52916857086000021392015-06-03T07:09:03.637-04:002015-06-03T07:09:03.637-04:00I dug the first paragraph. Maybe jumping from that...I dug the first paragraph. Maybe jumping from that to the present would work? Would like to know more about the invaders. My first thought was aliens, but perhaps not.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com