tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post5336596564105632775..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: First Impressions - Ashesmshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-13307022411125780342016-01-07T03:35:48.086-05:002016-01-07T03:35:48.086-05:00I say many thanks to the father of the website adm...I say many thanks to the father of the website admin I read this, because at this website I know a lot of information information that I did not know before his<br /><br /><a href="http://ow.ly/N7UcN" rel="nofollow">Obat Kaki Cantengan</a> <br /><a href="http://ow.ly/N7Ufx" rel="nofollow">Obat Benjolan Di Miss V</a> <br /><a href="http://ow.ly/N7Uii" rel="nofollow">Pengobatan Autoimun Herbal</a>Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17382737205881876895noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-44431806707947418542014-11-07T22:38:26.924-05:002014-11-07T22:38:26.924-05:00I think you tried to introduce too many concepts i...I think you tried to introduce too many concepts in too short a time. You've got the sun exploding, the all-seeing Globe, and the old boyfriend. Pick one and develop it a little more before bring in the next one.LD Mastersonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01202135756299574972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-15902550261329954112014-11-05T16:33:12.679-05:002014-11-05T16:33:12.679-05:00I commented over at Dianne's, but I'll add...I commented over at Dianne's, but I'll add a bit here. This sounds like it might drift into a lot of back story, when what we need is action. There's definitely potential, but we need something to bring us right into the story, now!Lizahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16170701034715108039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-20009933754471727562014-11-05T15:56:20.358-05:002014-11-05T15:56:20.358-05:00I would agree that there is a LOT packed into this...I would agree that there is a LOT packed into this small package. Which I found confusing. Confusing enough to put it aside? No, but some additional clarity would be needed. Quickly.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-80571208922585339592014-11-05T08:23:17.963-05:002014-11-05T08:23:17.963-05:00there are entirely too many adjectives in the firs...there are entirely too many adjectives in the first passage! DEZMONDhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14127166104359407763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-80418233497797588122014-11-05T08:18:00.689-05:002014-11-05T08:18:00.689-05:00Left my comment over on Dianne's site. I agree...Left my comment over on Dianne's site. I agree with Alex and Marcy here, too. Best of luck with this, Ashley! S.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-45998720125323206902014-11-05T06:50:22.292-05:002014-11-05T06:50:22.292-05:00I like the concept, but it is a lot to take in at ...I like the concept, but it is a lot to take in at once. So many 'names' and concepts thrown at you in just a couple paragraphs.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.com