tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post7329309670871155813..comments2024-03-28T05:05:30.116-04:00Comments on mainewords: first impressions - Lovesensemshatchhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-17248575142280613792012-09-10T16:22:19.378-04:002012-09-10T16:22:19.378-04:00Thank you for all your helpful comments. I'm t...Thank you for all your helpful comments. I'm tweaking my 1st page yet again. Thanks Marcy for having me. Your First Impressions series is so helpful. I'm contemplating starting with that 4th paragraph. We'll see:)Robinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09462486350293703991noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-38257580334508359892012-09-08T22:09:13.340-04:002012-09-08T22:09:13.340-04:00The concept is fascinating. It's quite unique!...The concept is fascinating. It's quite unique!<br /><br />I'd agree with your comments about the first and last paragraphs.Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-37972405724204402352012-09-08T13:36:52.469-04:002012-09-08T13:36:52.469-04:00Good comments here.
btw, I love your header photo!...Good comments here.<br />btw, I love your header photo!Rubye Jackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02511953177053448513noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-13924051635304483432012-09-08T10:42:31.208-04:002012-09-08T10:42:31.208-04:00Oh wow this line: It’s more than that rotten-egg ...Oh wow this line: It’s more than that rotten-egg sulfur smell I made in chem lab yesterday. It’s also, rotting meat, and moldy, squishy potatoes. A good dinner gone wrong<br />is so evocative.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-5073454850697561142012-09-07T13:43:27.421-04:002012-09-07T13:43:27.421-04:00Yeah, it took reading the entire paragraph a few t...Yeah, it took reading the entire paragraph a few times to figure out exactly what was going on. I agree that starting with her paranormal gift at the beginning might make it a lot easier to appreciate what she's seeing and doing and feeling with better understanding. <br /><br />Love the premise of someone who can look at photos and see into the relationships. Very cool. Luanne G. Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15762881276976395955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-50786202945096444302012-09-07T10:28:50.463-04:002012-09-07T10:28:50.463-04:00I remember this one!I remember this one!Matthew MacNishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03264738483763244969noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-15997311440519836172012-09-07T09:45:52.782-04:002012-09-07T09:45:52.782-04:00Unusual choice of words in some spots. I still don...Unusual choice of words in some spots. I still don't understand the first part. However, the rotten eggs part will stick with me all day.Alex J. Cavanaughhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09770065693345181702noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-75005807082557769682012-09-07T08:52:47.646-04:002012-09-07T08:52:47.646-04:00Wow, what a good job you did. I like the work and ...Wow, what a good job you did. I like the work and the critique. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12160669603997465454noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8733289016000331233.post-91829051072412073112012-09-07T08:32:20.518-04:002012-09-07T08:32:20.518-04:00After I read the opening a few times, I understood...After I read the opening a few times, I understood what Marcy was talking about. I think it's that the first sentence is a head thought, while the next is action. Maybe mingle the two.<br /><br />I love the voice. Nice job!S.A. Larsenッhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06241633272588383935noreply@blogger.com