Tuesday, April 12, 2011

I is for Interior Dialogue

Here is how Saphique, the book I'm reading now, opens. I've underlined the interior dialogue, the parts where we get thoughts in addition to sight, sound, smell, touch, taste.

"The alleyway was so narrow that Attia could lean against one wall and kick the other. She waited in the dimness, listening, her breath condensing on glistening bricks. A flicker of flames around the corner sent ripples down the walls.

The shouts were louder now, the unmistakable roar of an excited crowd. She heard howls of delight, sudden gales of laughter. Whistling and stamping. Applause.

Licking a fallen drip of condensation from her lips, she tasted its salty grit, knowing she had to face them. She had come too far, searched for too long, to back out now. It was useless feeling small and scared. Not if she ever wanted to Escape. She straightened, edged to end of the alley, and peered out."

7 comments:

  1. Nice sample of lovely inner dialogue! I do like the book cover too btw!! Take care
    x

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  2. I always struggle with inner dialogue so thank you for the example!

    Ellie Garratt

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  3. Great way to mark them out..and learn to use them as well :)

    Following you from A-Z challenge!

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  4. Haha, after reading this I realize how much internal dialogue I tend to have in my writing :) I'll have to use it wisely...

    Sarah Allen
    (my creative writing blog)

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  5. Nice post for I. It's a balancing act, for sure, getting everything in and getting it all to flow right.

    This book is in my TBR pile. (I didn't even know there was a second one until my son showed it to me.)

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  6. great lines to use for a post in internal dialogue. now im interested in picking up a copy of sapphique.thanks for sharing.
    nutschell
    www.thewritingnut.com

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